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Old 16-11-2017, 10:58 AM   #1
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[DnB] Concrete - Two Three (demo)

I made a DnB track that I plan to put in an EP once I have enough good tracks. This is a demo, exported out of Ableton (with normalization activated), no mastering so you might have to turn the volume up a bit.

I'd like some critics on the track in general and more specifically on the mix (to be honest I didn't spend a lot of time on it), so I can work on it to make it a better track!

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Old 17-11-2017, 11:44 AM   #2
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Re: [DnB] Concrete - Two Three (demo)

Nice track. I like the style, basstone and bassmelody. The drums are sick, maybe for me they could sound harder and with more changes. Surprise me more with crazy and different drumsequences.
In 1:32 min: There you have a little change with the sounds. Thats very cool. More of it and earlier those things...I want to here your track more than one time, so please, entertain me ;-)
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Old 17-11-2017, 11:49 AM   #3
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Re: [DnB] Concrete - Two Three (demo)

A bit too muddy for me, not really in love with the baseline or the filters over the percussion. The kick isn't as hard as it should be. It's kind of hard to listen to, there's not a whole lot going on here. There's some good stereo dynamic but that's about it. Maybe I'm just not into this sort of style.

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Old 17-11-2017, 07:01 PM   #4
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Re: [DnB] Concrete - Two Three (demo)

Thank for the feedback guys! Got to go back to the mix, and add more variations on the drums (a friend told me that too, so I guess its the right thing to do!).

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Old 17-11-2017, 11:38 PM   #5
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Re: [DnB] Concrete - Two Three (demo)

i like the bass tone but i feel it's just a tad too loud. i also feel like the drum break needs a bit more... balls? like a little bit of distortion of something. it does also need some other stuff for progression like drum variation, it is a bit repetitive, but i feel like something even as simple as some low-pass filter sweeps would help a lot. i also think some raps would sound great with this, kind like how Bong-Ra has on Bikini Bandits.
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Old 22-11-2017, 03:26 PM   #6
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Re: [DnB] Concrete - Two Three (demo)

I feel that the track would need some kind of "hook" to be remembered. Some vocal, sfx or something else that makes it stand out and give it more identity. Also, more variation on the beats to keep the listeners interest. Only listening to PC-speakers atm.
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Old 23-11-2017, 12:30 PM   #7
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Re: [DnB] Concrete - Two Three (demo)

Thanks for the inputs guys! I've tried a few things you said and I think it sounds better, I'll let you know when I got a new version.

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Re: [DnB] Concrete - Two Three (demo)

I'll just say that I like it. I do not want to criticize anything, it's nice to listen!
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Re: [DnB] Concrete - Two Three (demo)

I got a new version, taking in consideration your advices. Maybe it is better, maybe not, thanks for your time anyway!

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Re: [DnB] Concrete - Two Three (demo)

Interesting track, more Breakbeat than DnB, but I'm guessing you added the DnB tag because of the amen thing going on. Has a sort of Prodigy vibe to it in some ways. It does sound a bit more like filler material, probably because the same vibe rolls on and on.

I could actually imagine it in the context of a music video or something like that though. It's def not bad though.

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Old 30-12-2017, 01:45 PM   #11
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Re: [DnB] Concrete - Two Three (demo)

Thanks for the feedback, and yes it's way more breakbeat than DnB, but I have to admit I don't really bother with tags, most of the time I just write"DnB" without really thinking about it...

For this EP I have strong visuals ideas in my mind while writings the tracks, so that's cool if you can imagine it in the context of a video (a skate video would be nice, but I don't know any "real" skater...). Hopefully the other tracks will be more narrative though.

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